Saturday, October 29, 2011

Sweet Saturday Sample

Welcome! This week I'm sharing a scene from one of my works-in-progress, which I hope to have completed and submitted soon! Jess is a widow, working hard to keep her husband's snowplowing and lawn care business going, while keeping her sanity as a mom intact.

She found "old Jerry's" house, which thankfully had a short, straight drive. She plowed it, left a bill in the doorway, and made her way back home.
Rory was on his way out the door when she pulled in. She held her hand out to him, and he grimaced but gave her his backpack to check. It was nearly empty.
"Where are your books?"
"Didn't have any."
"You had your math book when you came home last night."
"Oh yeah."
"Get it. Did you do your work?"
"I don't know."
She sighed. He was going to miss the bus again.
They tracked down the book, under his desk. Sure enough, he hadn't done his work. She got him some notebook paper and sat him down at the kitchen table to finish his assignment while she made his lunch and changed clothes for her day job. 
They packed up, loaded into the truck and got to the school building with two minutes to spare. Like a good, invisible mom, she dropped him off on the opposite side of the street and refrained from giving him a goodbye kiss.
Then she drove on to her waitressing job, already feeling like she had put in a full day. Things had to get better, soon.

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  1. Beautiful sample, Pat! Moms are often invisible, aren't they, lol!

  2. Love your comment about the invisiable Mom. Guess things are going to get a lot tougher yet. Enjoyed the sample.

  3. Oh, wow. She has the patience of a saint! Great sample - I really feel for her.

  4. You've painted a vivid picture of her life as a widowed mother. I loved the "invisible mom" reference. I remember those days vividly and the restraint required to hold back that goodbye kiss.

  5. Looks like another winner there Pat

  6. A wonderful depiction of a patient and sacrificing single mom. And the fact that she's a widow, allows me to see a further glimpse into her pain. Great sample, Patricia!

  7. Great excerpt. So real and true to life.

  8. There's something about a woman who can do so much and still cling to hope that things will get better - it means she hasn't given up or lost hope. Great sample :)