Welcome back! This week I'm
continuing to share excerpts from my upcoming release, The Samurai's Garden. This scene takes place directly after the one I
posted last week:
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Hiro put the axe away and walked
back to his hut. He made use of the tiny washbowl and returned to Hanako’s hut
to find out what the day’s work would be. She was still busy cooking, so he sat
down on the cushion to watch her.
He hadn’t expected to be
comfortable here, but he had slept soundly and awakened full of energy. The air
here seemed cleaner, everything looked brighter, and he had tiptoed past her
hut to investigate the surroundings in the light of day. Noticing the nearly
depleted woodpile, he imagined her struggling to chop the wood for her fire.
The thought distressed him so much he chose the tallest tree he could find,
cutting it down and chopping it into pieces so that she wouldn’t have to worry
about the chore for a while.
Watching her now, as she worked on
the simple meal, he compared her to the women he had known. Embodying the
traditional concept of beauty, their smooth, uncalloused hands held delicately
painted fans in front of their powdered faces. Hanako’s fingernails were lined
with dirt, and her face was tanned from working outdoors. Her clear eyes shone
with intelligence and sincerity. Yet in her simplicity she was as elegant as a
geisha.
Hanako’s breakfast preparations
were interrupted by a strange bellow from behind the hut. Hiro looked up,
uncomprehending, while she jumped up and ran outside. He got up to follow her.
The cow had broken her lead rope
and had begun to trot away. Hanako ran after the animal, but the kimono she
wore didn't allow her to run very fast. She could only move her legs from the
knees down, and the cow got farther and farther away.
Hiro knew he could overtake the
animal more easily and raced after the errant cow. Charging past Hanako, he
finally reached the animal and grabbed what was left of the lead rope. Then he
slowed his steps, gradually bringing the cow to a halt. The massive animal
resisted his pull, but Hiro managed to turn her around.
A flash of gray to his right caught
his attention. A wolf? Was that why the cow had run? Perhaps he'd better go
hunting later.
Before Hiro had the cow back to the
hut, Hanako was already hard at work digging a hole. A sturdy pole and a
thicker rope lay on the ground nearby.
He admired her athletic movement,
as well as her fine form, as she set about her task. She was such a hard
worker. A sudden thought entered his mind, startling him with its intensity.
She is a strong woman, worthy of a
strong warrior.
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I like this guy. Your excerpt is intersting too. It makes me want to know exactly who he is. Is he himself samurai? Nice job.
ReplyDeleteElaine, he was a samurai until the emperor abolished the feudal system and the samurai class was eliminated. Yes, Hiro is a great guy!
ReplyDeleteLooks like the light bulb just went off for him. Love it when a guy suddenly appreciates a woman for who she is. Nice sample.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jenna! As my husband used to say, he occasionally needs to be smacked upside the head.
DeleteThis is a great example showing how well they get along
ReplyDeleteThanks, Lindsay! They are a fun couple to write about.
DeleteYou did a great job of depicting Hiro's growing awareness of Hanako. His appreciation of her abilities and natural beauty tell the reader a lot about the kind of man he is. Wonderful characters!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Sandy! It took seven years to write this book. I think part of it was because I didn't want to let these characters go.
DeleteAnd I like the way he steps forward, assuming responsibility for chores such as chopping wood and catching runaway cows and hunting possible wolves. They make a great team.
ReplyDeleteGunnar
Yeah. Dream guy, huh?
DeleteI love the clarity and power of this scene. I felt I was there. And I like the way Hiro's comparing the other women against her and finding them wanting.
ReplyDeleteThanks so much, Sherry! I think Hanako is the type of woman I want to be.
DeleteGreat scene! I love how much it reveals about Hiro's character and his gradual realization that they might be a couple.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Carrie-Anne! Not illustrating the development of a relationship is something I've been criticized for in the past. I'm glad I'm starting to show it better.
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